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[OFFER] 在ED录取之际回报cuus 2（NYUAD申请流水账+personal essay+CW Tips）&比较长，高兴看看我的流水帐就看一看吧，不高兴的直接奔最后的essay吧。+ n$ x/ q( w9 q% D+ D) E
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先前在论坛上看到单学长的回报贴，给我的帮助颇多，于是心中暗暗决定也要回报CUUS，今天终于如愿。
前两天第一份也是我的最后一份offer已经到了，NYU Abu Dhabi， ED Admission。
后来又收到了package，全奖。我的申请之路就此应该算是圆满结束了，对我来说这是可以想象到的最好的结果，对我来说，甚至好过HYP的全奖（当然HYP我应该是希望不大的?(?_?)?）。
决定ED是在某天凌晨的2点，当时躺在宿舍里，把它的学校网站从头到尾看了一遍，激动得就像几天前收到录取似的，如果说对&match&的理解的话，我想就是那一天才真正了解的吧。我的school list上到最后只有3所学校，NYUAD和两所保底校。
10月考试回来后，大把的时间都花在了几本王力雄的书上，感触特别多原本想从这些书中得到什么灵感，写出什么惊世骇俗的文章，但是后来发现无论自己受到多大的影响，它们充其量是已有的愤青言论的删节版。
于是开始和大家一样开始认真思考人生，思考自己的过去，自己是怎么样的人，又是怎么样变成这样的一个人等等&终于有了初步的思路，于是一边构思具体写法，一边开始写supplement，不得不说之前的国际义工经验和王力雄的书在我的supplements上帮了不少的忙，short answer一直只有思路，没有下笔。Personal essay经过我几番推倒，推倒再推倒，终于打算暂时停笔，再次下笔搁置了许久，直到后来的发现再不下笔不行了，才打算一边进行supple和recommendation的润色，一边搞定essay和short那大概是deadline前3天的样子。
现在想想才知道了什么叫&出来混都是要还的&。由于前面的procrastination，终于换来了后面的3 days in hell. 由于我是住校生，宿舍晚上没有电，3天中的前两天都在同学家（同性，而且不同的房间&）过的夜，两天一共睡了6个小时，光喝罐装咖啡喝掉近10罐（3块5一罐的雀巢）。平日里一天得睡10个小时还多，那几天真的是人困得都飘，但是当真是不敢睡。一次躺在床上定了睡一个小时的闹钟，死闹活闹没闹醒，2个半小时左右的时候不知道什么回事儿自己睁眼了&。两天以后，再次被推到了数次的supple终于定型了，essay写了一半，short answer 没动&那天早上起来，重新坐到电脑前的时候，后来算一算，离纽约的11月1日还差30个小时。
生命中能有那30个小时真的是一笔大财富&
悠然地在同学家里一边踱步，一边整理思路地过了4个小时后，便去和图书馆的出国党组织汇合了。记得没错的话，早饭是一罐咖啡&那是我跟本记不清怎么过的一天，只知道好像自己在一位申请Swarthmore的大神（我朋友啊 我朋友^ ^）身边儿，压力不用说了。只是为了main essay继续思路，我不停地在自习室走廊外面走来走去，或者到图书馆后门没人的楼梯里做各种奇怪的姿势(?&- -)。路人们经常用惊恐的眼光看着这个蓬头垢面的怪物&.但是如果能有思路的话，这一切我都忍了&偏偏就&到晚上6点左右，我的essay
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一名跑步发烧友写了写自己跑步的心路历程，然后就被12所牛校录取了？这essay有点牛！
一名跑步发烧友写了写自己跑步的心路历程，然后就被12所牛校录取了？这essay有点牛！
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Martin Altenburg是一名来自北达科塔的17岁高中生，今年申请季，小哥共收到了12封来自美国最一流名校的offer，8所藤校全部集齐，另外还有斯坦福、MIT、加州理工和，简直流弊到不行。
从小哥收到的offer就可以猜到小哥肯定是个理工科大牛，所以关于小哥参加的各种全国竞赛、获过的奖以及突出的成绩我们就无需多说了，这肯定是刚需，今天我们重点想说说小哥的文书。
要说MIT、加州理工和芝大那非人的学习强度和压力大家都有所耳闻，能被这些学校看上的肯定不是一般的学霸，必须得是巨抗压巨抗虐的那种。那招生官是如何看到小哥身上坚毅的性格和高度抗压的能力的呢，这恐怕就是小哥文书的功劳了。到底这篇文书有多牛逼，大家不妨来仔细阅读下吧！
My favorite time to run is at night.
This particular run in early August brought a break to the humid, muggy weather I left on the East Coast. I used my body as a human psychrometer, knowing that the cold feeling of evaporating sweat signaled much needed dry air.
I cross over the bridge into Minnesota. Out of my three sports, cross country is definitely my worst -- but I continue to be hooked on it. Unlike swimming and track, my motivation to run is heavily intrinsic. I live for the long runs I take on by myself. While they rarely happen during our season, we were assigned a long run to complete over our first weekend of cross country. In reality, I was supposed to go six miles, but felt eight gave me more time to explore the home I had just returned to. My mind begins to wander as I once again find my rhythm.
My train of thought while running is similar to the way one thinks in the minutes before sleep -- except one has more control over how these thoughts progress and what tangents they move off of. While special relativity would be the "proper" thing to think about, especially at MITES, I revive the violin repertoire I had turned away from for so long and begin playing it in my head. I'm now at the edge of town in between the cornfields. The streaming floodlights on the open road give me a sense of lonely curiosity, reminiscent of the opening lines of Wieniawski's first violin concerto. I come up with adaptations of the melody in my head, experimenting with an atonality similar to Stravinsky's.
I turn south onto a highway heading towards downtown. The dark night sky is broken by the oncoming light pollution. While I've longed for a road trip across the country, the neon lights from Sunset Lanes will have to do for Las Vegas. Turning west, I see a man and perk up as I try to look more menacing than I really am. But I relinquish. I realize that I did such an act simply because of the color of his skin. I kick myself for reverting to passive racism -- something I spent much of the summer trying to overcome.
The bridge over Main Avenue leads me back into North Dakota and downtown Fargo. My city is on the eve of its annual pride week -- the largest in North Dakota. Beyond the rainbow flags lining downtown, I see the Catholic cathedral I attend every Sunday outside of the summer. The juxtaposition brings back memories of trying to come to terms with my own beliefs. The conservatism on my mom's side of the family often clashes with the more liberal views of my dad's family. Fargo is known for its "nice" attitude, but the discussion of controversial issues is often set aside in favor of maintaining peace. On the surface this can be good, but it makes change a long and cumbersome process, and has caused me to become very independent in finding my own belief system -- something especially difficult when these beliefs may have to do with your future identity.
The remaining part of my run is short and uneventful. The fact that the traffic lights have switched to blinking yellow and red means that I have been out later than usual. When I get home, I find that my run took somewhere around an hour -- I honestly don't care about time during my distance runs. Longs runs are often seen as a runner battling the distance rather than time. But for me, long runs are a journey -- both physically and mentally. Each time I run a route, I understand my surroundings and city more and more, and couldn't be more excited and sad to know that I'm leaving this place in a year's time.
在文书中，Martin通过写在长跑中自己的感受和心路历程，生动地向招生官展现了自己有目标、有行动力、坚持不懈的优秀品质。文章简单朴实，却非常有说服力，就这样成功敲开了12所学校的大门！
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